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A4 Issue Four

If you prefer you can download the pdf here.

My unending gratitude to Matt and John Yuan (deputy publishers of 1First Comics) who volunteered way back on issue 1 to proofread (off the back of a plaintive twitter plea) and ending up both being great proofreaders and even better editors - constantly encouraging and giving little notes that never alter the fabric of the story but always help.

Stories this issue:

Notifications, Memories of War, Cold Caller, The Civil War, The Monster, Sign Unseen, Ghosts.

A4 Issue Four Notes!

Gah, two stories with War in the title. So annoying. Hadn't spotted it until now, but there it is. It will be my eternal shame.

There were two things drilled in to me from English lessons in secondary school (which I did rather enjoy, I loved writing, and was told to apply for O-Levels early, so I did, and then I didn't do any work because I was fundamentally lazy - so failed it) anyway, the two things: never use the word got/gotten (I think this was my teachers personal bugbear, with teenagers writing "I got given a book then got a clip round the there and got out of there, before he got me" even I'm uncomfortable seeing the word "got" in anything I write) and never repeat a word if you can help it (obvious "I", "and" and so on are all fine). So two wars. Not good. Am annoyed. (Should point out, this is entirely a quirk of my own making!)

From hereon in there will likely be spoilers!

I had planned on a halloween all horror special - or at least as best as I'm able, but of course, I couldn't quite come up with every single story as a horror, so let's start with the least horror like story:

Notifcations

I suppose this and Ghosts share a very common through line, rejection and knowing the person who rejected you never even thinks of you. For a full exploration of this idea, watch the amazing "The Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind".

Memories of War

There's a lot going on in the world, and much of it can be traced back so far that you'll never find the beginning point (hello from Northern Ireland!) - and the question is, if everyone lost their memories would those wars still continue. (this story optimistically says we'd all stop, I have a horrible feeling we wouldn't)

Cold Caller

Phew! Lighter fair! Actually there's a different story that uses the same sort of idea (the no-hawkers caveat that many people have at their door) I've been sitting noodling as a short comic for a few years (how many? oh man, it's embarrassing to tell - but let's say I first thought of it pre-pandemic) it would be far too long to do as one of these stories, so this slightly different version of it popped in to my head.

I am pretty proud of that title though, it came late - after I'd written a bunch of the stories and I was thinking "gah, now i need a title" and ping! there it was!

I did want to do stuff that was just a smidge lighter than last issue, because I've been told some of this stuff is DARK. I think of it all in the abstract, words on paper rather than real monsters. But we're haunted by the real and the imaginary, I suppose.

The Civil War

I saw a writer (a good writer;   it'll be a good book) talking their new Zombie book and it got me thinking, that zombie stories tend to be the ultimate "yeah of course I was the assehole prepping for the end of the world, and look, I WAS RIGHT" and I thought "what if instead of it being zombies, it's that everyone was just really really nice to each other ... oh... those asseholes wouldn't change..."

The Monster

I'll be honest, andI bet readers can tell, I shoehorned frankenstien in too this (because I wanted monsters, dammit)

Here's my orginal story idea from the apple notes app:

He had fragmented himself, Pumping his entire written and audio corpus through AI Large Language Models, and created an army of bots, one for each of the balkanised social media platforms. And he was finally free. Free to get on with work.

Is it better? it might be.

Sight Unseen

This could be policitical satire, I suppose. In the hands of a better writer. Instead it's simply a piece of fiction.

Ghosts

Gotta be honest, I just loved the shape and sound of the story. I love that it works on a couple of levels.  It pretty much came out fully formed, and so short. Honestly this is the joy of these shorts, there's not an ounce of fat on the idea, there's no point trying to extend it, and there's a sort of poetic quality to it. Anyway, might be one of my favs.

 

Hope you enjoy it, I would love to know what you think - you can fire me off an email to pjholden at gmail dot com if you like!

YOU CAN’T HANDLE THE TOOTH!

Dentist today. Possible one of the most painful visits I’ve ever had to the dentist (marginally beating the last visit when I popped in to replace a bit of a filling that had popped out only for the dentist to announce I needed a tooth removed, that is a day that will live long in infamy)

AND WORSE! Nothing got done. It was literally too painful. So we’re giving it a day or two to rest before proceeding.

My dentist is also one of the ones going private. I find myself entirely frustrated about this, firstly I genuinely believe in the NHS and am willing to pay more for the damn thing to work properly, second of all, sure sometimes I can afford the odd private dental treatment, but I’m a freelancer, at some point I’ll be faced with needing dental work and not be able to afford the damn thing, and finally – and this is particuarly frustrating, now I have to be an expert on what detnal plans are best for me. I don’t want to know the difference between dentplan and bupa dentists. I DON’T CARE. I just, occasionally, want a dentist.

(Back on friday)


My patreon is still sort of functioning, obviously I haven’t updated it in some time, and I feel a bit guilty about that, but I’ve decided to consider it a gift from some people to me to keep you know… internetting. (I’ve given people lots of opportunities to cancel!) There’s a bit of a chunk of change once a year in there that I can download to my bank account (not serious money, but enough to make the effort worth it) and I don’t like locking my posts behind a paywall, though I do like having somewhere I can consider off-the-record (for advance looks and so on)

I’ve just linked the patreon to the blog, not sure how that will work out, we’ll see I suppose.

What does this mean to you? absolutely nothing. If you wanna sign up for my patreon, I can guarantee you nothing beyond my forgetting it exists and then suddenly remembering, but equally I can guarantee as little as you might think it is, in this perilous freelance life once a year it is actually make a quantifiable difference.


Youngest son had a sleepover, well, more of a talk-over last night. First time he’s hosted. Kept wife up all night from yakking, so may also be the last time for that.


The radio DJ Steve Wright died, he was a fixture on radio in the UK since the 80s, and as a spotty teen working my first day job in the mid-to-late 80s, he was the background noise of every single afternoon in work.

The shop, Botanic Computer Centre, was a family owned/run shop that started as a radio hardware shop, in 1949 (originally called Ideal Radio)- run by two brothers Bert and Davey (though actually Davey did a lot of the legwork, it was almost certianly Bert’s shop). By the time I started they were old men, in their 60s and Davey, who spent a surprising amount of time driving me from job to job (we’d sell Amstrad PCW8256s and PCW9512s – giant beasts of machines, with integral crt monitors, and often with vast daisy wheel style printers) and in the process he’d turn on the radio, hear Steve Wright, then complain about “bloody yaya music” and turn it to radio ulster (which was more talk radio)

I find the older I get the more I hear music and think “that sounds like bloody yaya music”.

Me at work in the sister shop to Botanic – A&F Corner. I suspect this was actually around early 90s?

It’s weird when a company you worked for for so long no longer exists, especially an IT company, but then Bert – a very smart man, with – even in to his lates 60s/70s was fascinated by tech (I remember us looking at the images from the first rover on mars) always thought the internet might be a flash in the pan.

The only thing worse than being busy

Is having nothing to do.

This weekend finished part four of the Dredd story I’m doing (it’s six parts – two more to go! Always excited to finish something, a final sprint towards the end) it started with me determined to do the entire thing with a brush, but, frankly, my hands and eyes and possibly glasses aren’t really up to it. It went to half brush/half pen, and finally all digital.

I think everything is now likely to be digital (though I’m aware, I’ve been here before).

Managed to wrangle it back on deadline too.

Did a couple of pages of a pitch series too – three pages of that to go.

And just started a new thing. Five issues, 20 pages per issue.

There’s an unfortunate bit of overlap, but hopefully it won’t be too bad – now kids are back in school and my wife’s arm is healing enough to get some work done.

Tomorrow I head off to a local TV company to do some story boarding, tbh I could do without it – but it’s hard – impossible even – to turn down work, especially when I came into this year with nothing at all lined up, except bills.

The five issue series should see me through to the new year with work (sept/oct/nov/dec/jan) and after that, who knows? 

Hopefully one of the random pitches will find a home. I’d like more american work, this five issue is with a US company but I struggle to get US work (I want to say I’m a poor networker, but I’m good at meeting people I’m just horrendous at follow up, and it’s follow up that gets the work – there’s a part of my brain that just doesn’t do well at contacting people after a few months and saying “Oh hey! Remember me!” but we all gotta do it.).

And that’s the news…

Attic attack

Everything has to be designed. EVERYTHING.

Here’s an attic sketch. It starts with a quick google sketch and then picking some elements of an attic I think will quickly distil the essence so we can see it’s an attic from multiple views. It also needs to break a couple of rules (gotta be taller to fit in what I need to fit in). Then you play a game of “how many things can I think of that will fit in here” (and you amaze yourself with how limited your imagination is). Try it!

Attic: boxes. Big bags filled with stuff. Old mirror. Bird cage. Rolled up carpet. Stacked newspapers of a specific date. Brush. Light bulb hanging from ceiling (which means you need to figure out where the electric is coming from, so probably visible cable of light bulb tracing down to either a wall socket (unlikely) or a cable trailing behind a bolstered wall), a entrance (is it a side entrance? unlikely, from below? probably, trap door like thing) more boxes and er… oh god.. 

And then you try and not draw all of that stuff because the story isn’t about that (unless there’s a specific prop you’ll need later)

This sentence has five words

I can’t remember when or where I first read this little bit of writing wisdom, certainly it was a long time ago and it’s stuck with me, though not for writing. It’s from the book “100 ways to improve your writing” by Gary Provost, I’ve since ordered the book up (it’s a fun little collection of snippets like this that I’m sure can help any writer). I’ll let you read it and tell you what I think…

This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety. Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length. And sometimes when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals–sounds that say listen to this, it is important.

So write with a combination of short, medium, and long sentences. Create a sound that pleases the reader’s ear. Don’t just write words. Write music. 

Ok. Now, as this applies to comics – writing comics isn’t writing. Your reader will only ever read the words you’ve written if they’re included in dialogue or captions (or any other narrative tricks you’ve picked up), for the most part you’re writing for an artist and there it’s about clarity and being succinct. (Five words sentences? Great as long as it’s of the line “Dredd stands firm, looking grim.”)

But what is important is that the lessons within this little gem be applied across the board to your comics. Instead of “five word sentences” think “small identical sized panels” – a few? ok, But then let them explode! Build up energy with a bunch of panels, burst out with a splash. Make the panels interesting to look at and it will be interesting. Humans are easily bored, it’s a genetic thing (I once saw an experiment with a sea cucumber showing how even something with barely a brain can be bored) it’s why flashing lights attract us, why sitting still can make things invisible and why the coctail party phenomena works.

Your comics can be guilty of many crimes, but boring should never be one of them.

Current working methods

If you’re a reader of my old blog, you’ll have read periodic updates on how I work – primarily because like me in a party, the moment I feel like I’m comfortable I have to upended a table and jump out a window (or find a tiny kitchen corner to hide in).

The current process goes like this:

Read script.

Create a multi page document of the length of the script + a few pages at the back for layouts/designs.

Use a page at the back, creating a page frame (a specific layer in clip studio paint) and divide it so it’s exactly nine frames, which I’ll use as my guideline for thumbs.

Digital thumbs, I find drawn this way are actually more detailed than my normal pencilled thumbs, and can sometimes double as pencils.

Happy with thumbs, I’ll cut the thumb out for the first page, then paste that into the first document, scaling it up to fill the page.

I’ll create a “pencils” folder (setting it to draft – again a Clip Studio Paint specific thing) and make it a pale blue colour, dropping the enlarged thumb in. I’ll create a new pencil layer within that folder, and trace/finish the rough thumbs into useable pencils.

Once I’ve got my pencils, I’ll create an inks layer, and just ink the damn thing.

That’s it.

I’ve a couple of rules of thumbs for making the digital work go smoother, but you’ll have to be a backstage patreon for that!

Drawing table update

Sometimes I get a big chunk of a page done on one day, but don’t count it as a finished page, then count it the next day when finished. On that basis, I finished two pages today and, I think, two yesterday? Can’t remember. Sometimes you work so fast you lose track.

Luckily it’s all digital so I don’t have to keep piles of paper beside me. (That’s a nightmare, three pages a day of paper printout, sounds great but try managing all those sheets of paper coming off your drawing board like you’re a printer with the output tray disconnected)

Anyway here’s a dredd head I’m happy with (Dredd in winter gear)

I’ve never drawn this many Dredd’s in one strip before. It’s funny how your strength can suddenly become a weakness – I had a great dredd chin down pat, but suddenly I’ve got to draw lots of Dredd’s and you’re desperate not to repeat the same old face/expression.

Dredd

Behind the scenes, I explain what’s going on with this scaffolding I’ve drawn all over Dredd’s face, but here’s the picture for everyone else!

Bloody Helmet

Look, I’ve drawn the world’s angriest lawman professionally for coming up on 16 years (and a stint as an enthusiastic amateur for the best part of all my life up until then) and I still haven’t figured him out.

This Dredd head (Dredd is in a winter outfit, so it’s a little different to his normal gear) looks ok, probably – perspective on faces/heads is tricky since we’re not perfectly square shapes (well, my head is, but your’s probably isn’t).

If you haven’t spotted what’s desperatly wrong with this pic – it’s Dredd’s helmet (and the bit of neck that’s missing, but we’ll ignore that)

But drawing a very simple perspective cube over/ around the head though, we can get find points which should match up (without trying to plot the entire shape in perspective) and these points can then help us correct the shot – I’ve drawn a rough perspective cube in red, with guidelines, and put little blue arrows where I think the corrections need to go.

I pick points on the helmet that I think SHOULD line up and then fix the drawing to do so.

Looking at the blue arrows on the bottom (left and right) it should be very obvious that the bottom of Dredd’s helmet doesn’t match, in effect making the right side of his helmet look longer than the other side.

The blue arrows at the top (again on left and right) should match up where the eye slots are, but again, should be obvious here they just don’t.

(You can see this is a really rough perspective grid though, so I’m not overly fussed on 100% accuracy, just a rough “looks about right” which is far easier)

But editing the drawing and making these things match up, we get this…

We’ve used those little blue arrows to help us place the features of the helmet so the line up in perspective.

Without the grid…

It’s a subtle thing, but I think this is a better dredd (oh, I added that bit of neck)

No… to erase this dredd forever since I didn’t draw him quite angry enough for the script… bugger.

On the drawing board today…

Two pages completed today.

WIP on Dredd…(following the post on reflections, I got this in to a panel that I’m pleased with)

And did a second page today, can’t speak about it – it’s a pitch, so it’ll be long time before it’s firm enough to speak off, but you can see this…

Kids back at school, wife at work. Got plenty done. Still doesn’t seem like enough though.

(These pages are entirely digital)

WIP Dredd

Spoiler free, look at those idiotic tanks.

Pencilled and inked a page today, of which this is a part – hot off the digital tablet.

Even at two pages per day this month I may not catch up on everything I have to do.