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Emma Newman writes short stories, novels and novellas in multiple speculative fiction genres. She is a professional audiobook narrator, and a Hugo Award winning podcaster. Her current podcasts are ‘Imagining Tomorrow’ and ‘Tea and Sanctuary’. www.enewman.co.uk

The Script

Comic script - this is exactly what happened to my son in the small hours of this morning. I only saw the messages when I woke up, and he told me what happened once he was awake. It made me laugh, and I immediately thought it might make a fun comic and Beanie agreed!

A young man (if you want to base him loosely on my son, he’s 16 years old, tall, short brown hair, blue eyes) is about to leave his room but spots a huge spider on wall next to the door (it is on the wall that the door would rest against when open and the dressing gown hanging on the back of the door would brush against where the spider is) . 

He is terrified of spiders, so he can’t open the door. It’s the small hours of the morning.

He leaps onto his bed on the other side of the room, a bookcase blocking the line of sight between him and the spider and tries to phone his Mum who is sleeping in her room across the landing, and message her on WhatsApp, but her phone is on ‘Do not disturb’ so there’s no answer. 

Panicking, he phones friends until one finally picks up - ‘Help! There’s a huge spider in my room!’

Friend: What colour is it?

Beanie: Black? Brown? I dunno! It was BIG

Friend: You’re okay, I don’t think they can climb.

Beanie: IT’S ON MY WALL! (throughout the rest of this exchange the friend also now freaking out is just making Bean panic even more!) 

Friend: Oh, that one can climb then! Just dash out the door!

Beanie: It’s by the door, I can’t get out!

Friend: IT’S IN YOUR ROOM?! 

Beanie: Yes, I told you this!

He peeps round the bookcase. The spider is gone!

Beanie: It’s gone!

Friend: THAT MEANS IT COULD BE ANYWHERE!

Beanie’s eyes flick to all the posters it could be hiding behind, and all the clothes and stuff on his floor it could now be lurking under.

Beanie: YOU ARE NOT HELPING!

He hangs up and hides in the duvet. If you think that a final shot on the spider’s hiding place would be a good ending, do add that in, but happy to end it on Beanie hiding.

 

Artists Notes

One of the goals of the project was to try and work with as many writers as possible, and so I told every writer "Don't worry - I'll take any format of script" - there are sort of comic script standards, and attempts have been made in the past to really hammer them in, but for the most part every writer I work with works a little different anyway. That said, this script required a lot of thinking about to get the most out of the story (you can argue amongst yourself whether that's what I did).

Firstly there's a sort of action limit in comics, every action will usually require one panel - character opens door, walks through door, locks door? that's three panels. I felt like, on this script, there was too much going on to fit in the super limited single page I had, plus some of the action I wanted to build it up a bit more, so I knew I'd be putting a bunch of panels towards the getting ready to go out (because build up build up build up build up PUNCHLINE!) I also knew I wanted the dialogue interaction to have that ratatatat rapid delivery, which meant I'd get a single panel for that set of dialogue. This meant brutalising the story a little, cutting out the contacting of his mum and going straight to the friend. I also wanted a little end note on the spider - I thought that would be fun, a happy little chappy. (remove the last spider panel and the page feels like it's not quite finished - it's a figurative and literal full stop)

The manga shading effect/speedlines came after I'd drawn it and realise it would work better with a little bit of manga (tonally too, fits a teen), and the coloured lettering was because I needed someway to quickly distinguish the two sets of dialogue (I decided to eschew clip studio's balloon lettering tools a) because it would take ages to get exactly how I want it and b) because I thought I could add more character to it that way. The background of the room is pretty much a direct tracing of my teenage son's bedroom (which is so quintessentially teenager it looks like a set from a modern John Hughes teen comedy). (And it's all my son's work, he's done that all without parental help)

Anyway. This was finished the day before publication, but I think it turned out ok.

Oh, and because I drew it, and then slathered lettering all over it, here's the page without dialogue...

One Small Step

My youngest son has introduced me to Junji Ito how does a magnificent line in existential dread and horror, so I’ve been playing with that with a view to seeing what I can do in short one page form. I’ve written ideas for two other things done, but here’s the only one I’ve fully written, drawn and lettered. Hope you like!


An ending of sorts…

We’ve decided to stop (well, this is more on me than John). Monster Macs has been fun, but much more work than the folklore stories and a bought of illness (I’ve IBS which will flare up occasionally but has recently stolen over a week from me) means we’re (ok, I am) getting much more behind that I would have wanted.

By way of apology, I’ve uploaded a pdf the folklore thursday stories.

We’ll still be looking for a home for monster macs, and, hopefully a publisher interested in investing for us to work on it. 

For now, I just want to say thank you. 

If you download the file, and cancel your patreon you should save yourself a little bit of cash. 

Hopefully you’ll continue to enjoy whatever work John and I put out, you can see me on twitter.



Monster Macs chapter 2, page 4

“At last we reveal ourselves to the jedi…”

Here we go, finally we see our bigfoot! Hope it’s been worth the wait!

Hope your xmas was safe & peaceful to, and my gosh I think we deserve a calm and peaceful 2021 (it’s not starting out like it, but fingers crossed, right?)


Monster MACS script: Pages Nine and Ten

PAGE NINE

Okay, I think this is a six panel page, but I’m going to leave the exact beats up to you, PJ. I know what the first and last panels should be, but between them, I think I may as well let you see what you think works best.


Panel One

Here we’re outside in the garden, directly behind the hairy creature we’ve just glimpsed through the window. We can see the back of the creature’s head and shoulders and can see Biko’s window ahead and above us / it. The creature is turning its head to one side, so that we can see (a bit of) its profile. It is sniffing the air as if it’s smelled something interesting. You could even do a “Bisto” smell trail, if you think that would work (or not).

One FX.

FX: snff-snff


Panels Two to Five(?)

So, what’s going on here is that our hairy friend has smelled some open snacks which have been left in Biko’s tree-house, which doubles as MACS HQ. Without ever showing the creature fully (definitely not its full face), but showing shots of its hands, feet, etc, I want us to follow its short journey up into the tree-house, sniffing all the way. Shots of the sniffing nose, maybe? Hands and/or feet on the ladder up to the tree-house. The top of the hairy head pushing up through the trapdoor in the floor of the tree-house. I think that what the creature is smelling is a big open bag of Tayto crisps, which we can maybe see in the foreground as the head appears inside the tree-house. Thinking of the ET eating M&Ms riff, but using crisps, basically.  We might even risk a “Yum” from our creature?


Final Panel

We the hairy creature’s foot / ankle is tripping a laser tripwire as they grab the big bag of crisps. I think all we need to do is show the two terminals (or whatever you’d call them) which face each other, rather than an actual laser beam (unless you think a beam being broken would work better visually). Google kids Spy tripwire alarm, and you’ll see what there are loads of them. A little LED on one of the terminals is glowing red, and making a tiny “bip” type noise.


PAGE TEN

Again, I think this is six(ish) panels, but the exact beats are up to you. Dialogue isn’t set in stone if you don’t think there’s room for all of it in the composition you go for.


First Panel

This panel shows the a small light bulb lighting up in the darkness of Biko’s bedroom. I think its probably part of an electronics kits that he’s built himself, so it might be like a breadboard type thing. There’s a handwritten label taped to the contraption which reads INTRUDER ALERT.

Now whether, you want to just show this detail as a panel of its own and then “pull back” to show Biko wakened by the light and the noise, and looking towards the light, is up to you. But that’s what happens; the light and the sound wake Biko and he looks towards the light in shock.

There is one FX from the alarm (not too big / loud) and Biko has two balloons.

FX: bzzz bzzz bzzz

Biko: What the heck…?

Biko: Someone’s in the tree-house!


Panels Three(?) to Five(?)

Okay, we want to get Biko and Fort outside so that Biko can climb up and investigate who is in the tree-house. I don’t know if a straight cut to Biko pushing open the back door of the house works? He has a torch in one hand, the beam cutting through the darkness, but is barefoot in his pyjamas.

Maybe we show him climbing the ladder so that we’re looking down at him, and we can see Fort on the ground below looking up at him/us?

He could have a couple of whispered balloons here.

Biko: Li? Evie?

Biko: Is that you?


Then maybe a panel of the interior of the tree-house, with a bit of our hairy visitor in the foreground all in silhouette, busily munching crisps. Biko is pushing the door of the tree-house open and entering towards us, the beam of his torch not yet on the hairy fella.

Biko: We didn’t say anything about a midnight…

FX: munch crunch munch


Final Panel

This is a reaction shot of Biko’s face (head/shoulders) as his torch finally illuminates the visitor properly. He looks shocked and stunned.

He has one balloon (and maybe the munching continues?)

Biko: …feast…?

Monster Macs Chapter 2 Page 3

GASP! What has Biko found!

You’ll have to wait until after Christmas, I’m afraid – what a cliff hanger…

Thanks for sticking with us through this, the most terrible of years, been enormous fun doing both the folklore comics and moving over to do Monster Macs – every page feels like we’re doing our own saturday morning kids adventure movie and we’re running for an entire year!

Happy xmas all!

Monster MACS script: Page Eight (Chapter 2)

All the pages in this chapter are in spreads (Eight & Nine, Ten & Eleven, etc)


PAGE EIGHT

This is a seven-panel page, with three tiers; two panels on the top, three across the middle, and two on the bottom. This page is all about under-lighting and side-lighting, I think; the glow of computer screens in darkened bedrooms.


Panel One

This is a shot (fairly close) shot of a zombie in a Fortnite style computer game getting blasted with a weapon. I think it’s a First Person game, like Doom though. Pixelated green blood is splattering out at us.

There is one FX from the blast, and one balloon from off.

FX: BLAMM

Balloon: Die, monster! Die!


Panel Two

We’ve pulled out so that we can see that we’re in Li’s bedroom and he’s playing on his Switch type console. He has a controller in his hands and the Switch is either in its dock so he’s playing on a TV screen, or else he has the little screen propped up somewhere. It’s night now. We can see the starry sky out of a window in the room. Li is wearing pyjamas and is wrapped in his duvet, sitting on or next to his bed. He’s wearing headphones with a mic and is talking as he plays.

Li has two balloons and there are two tailless broadcast balloons showing what he’s hearing in his headphones.

Li: Did you guys seethat?

Balloon 1: Huh? Oh sorry, Li…

Li: Are you even watching?

Balloon 2: I was looking at this thing Fort dropped.


Panel Three

Here we can see Biko in his own darkened bedroom (probably head and shoulders). He’s also wearing a pair of gaming headphones with a mic. He’s holding the whistle in one hand, examining it closely. He’s looking a bit shocked and insulted by what he’s hearing over his headphones.

Biko has two balloons, and there is one tailless broadcast balloon.

Biko:  I reallythink it might be a proper archaeological artefact.  Maybe a–

Balloon (interrupting): *SNORE*

Biko: Hey, there’s no need to be like that!


Panel Four

This is a shot of Evie (head and shoulders again) fast asleep. The headphones she’s been wearing knocked askew. She’s in (or on) her bed. Maybe side-lit by the computer / Switch screen somewhere off panel (or maybe we can see a bit of the Switch on the bed next to her.

There are two tailless broadcast balloons, and one FX from Evie.

Balloon 1: That wasn’t me! I think Evie’s fallen asleep on us again.

Evie: *SNORE*

Balloon 2: Hang on, I’ll mute her.


Panel Five

This is a shot looking past Biko towards his bedroom door. His mum is leaning into the room, holding the door open a crack, and talking to him.

Biko’s mum has one balloon, Biko one, one tailless broadcast.

Mum: Time for bed now, Biko. Say goodnight.

Biko: Oh, I’m going to have to go, Li.

Balloon: Okay, see you tomorrow!


Panel Six

Here we have a wider shot of Biko’s bedroom (more or less from his mum’s POV, I think – she might even be in shot slightly?). Fort needs to be in there snuggled up either on the bottom bed, taking up most of the room, or else maybe in a dog basket under a desk. It either case, in the centre of the panel we have Biko’s bedroom window, which we know faces out on to the garden which borders on to the woods. His curtains are not quite shut, and we can see a bit of of the woods and garden through the gap on them. Standing, looking up at the window, is the same creature with shining eyes we saw on Page Seven. It’s really small here (maybe not even possible to see), but we’re zooming in on the next panel. Biko is putting his headphones on the desk, and heading towards his bed. He’s smiling towards us / his mum.

I think the chapter title goes across the bottom of this (and maybe the next?) panel. But it’s up to you where you think it fits best.

He has one balloon, and she has one in reply.

Biko: Night, mum.

Mum: Night night, son.


Panel Seven

Here we’ve zoomed in on the gap in the curtains so that we can see the mysterious hairy creature looking up at us (thinking of this as very Moomins with the Groke).

There is one balloon from Biko’s mum, off panel.

Mum (off): Don’t let the bedbugs bite.