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Emma Newman writes short stories, novels and novellas in multiple speculative fiction genres. She is a professional audiobook narrator, and a Hugo Award winning podcaster. Her current podcasts are ‘Imagining Tomorrow’ and ‘Tea and Sanctuary’. www.enewman.co.uk

The Script

Comic script - this is exactly what happened to my son in the small hours of this morning. I only saw the messages when I woke up, and he told me what happened once he was awake. It made me laugh, and I immediately thought it might make a fun comic and Beanie agreed!

A young man (if you want to base him loosely on my son, he’s 16 years old, tall, short brown hair, blue eyes) is about to leave his room but spots a huge spider on wall next to the door (it is on the wall that the door would rest against when open and the dressing gown hanging on the back of the door would brush against where the spider is) . 

He is terrified of spiders, so he can’t open the door. It’s the small hours of the morning.

He leaps onto his bed on the other side of the room, a bookcase blocking the line of sight between him and the spider and tries to phone his Mum who is sleeping in her room across the landing, and message her on WhatsApp, but her phone is on ‘Do not disturb’ so there’s no answer. 

Panicking, he phones friends until one finally picks up - ‘Help! There’s a huge spider in my room!’

Friend: What colour is it?

Beanie: Black? Brown? I dunno! It was BIG

Friend: You’re okay, I don’t think they can climb.

Beanie: IT’S ON MY WALL! (throughout the rest of this exchange the friend also now freaking out is just making Bean panic even more!) 

Friend: Oh, that one can climb then! Just dash out the door!

Beanie: It’s by the door, I can’t get out!

Friend: IT’S IN YOUR ROOM?! 

Beanie: Yes, I told you this!

He peeps round the bookcase. The spider is gone!

Beanie: It’s gone!

Friend: THAT MEANS IT COULD BE ANYWHERE!

Beanie’s eyes flick to all the posters it could be hiding behind, and all the clothes and stuff on his floor it could now be lurking under.

Beanie: YOU ARE NOT HELPING!

He hangs up and hides in the duvet. If you think that a final shot on the spider’s hiding place would be a good ending, do add that in, but happy to end it on Beanie hiding.

 

Artists Notes

One of the goals of the project was to try and work with as many writers as possible, and so I told every writer "Don't worry - I'll take any format of script" - there are sort of comic script standards, and attempts have been made in the past to really hammer them in, but for the most part every writer I work with works a little different anyway. That said, this script required a lot of thinking about to get the most out of the story (you can argue amongst yourself whether that's what I did).

Firstly there's a sort of action limit in comics, every action will usually require one panel - character opens door, walks through door, locks door? that's three panels. I felt like, on this script, there was too much going on to fit in the super limited single page I had, plus some of the action I wanted to build it up a bit more, so I knew I'd be putting a bunch of panels towards the getting ready to go out (because build up build up build up build up PUNCHLINE!) I also knew I wanted the dialogue interaction to have that ratatatat rapid delivery, which meant I'd get a single panel for that set of dialogue. This meant brutalising the story a little, cutting out the contacting of his mum and going straight to the friend. I also wanted a little end note on the spider - I thought that would be fun, a happy little chappy. (remove the last spider panel and the page feels like it's not quite finished - it's a figurative and literal full stop)

The manga shading effect/speedlines came after I'd drawn it and realise it would work better with a little bit of manga (tonally too, fits a teen), and the coloured lettering was because I needed someway to quickly distinguish the two sets of dialogue (I decided to eschew clip studio's balloon lettering tools a) because it would take ages to get exactly how I want it and b) because I thought I could add more character to it that way. The background of the room is pretty much a direct tracing of my teenage son's bedroom (which is so quintessentially teenager it looks like a set from a modern John Hughes teen comedy). (And it's all my son's work, he's done that all without parental help)

Anyway. This was finished the day before publication, but I think it turned out ok.

Oh, and because I drew it, and then slathered lettering all over it, here's the page without dialogue...

Biko’s House

John tells me it’s important Biko’s house backs on to the forest, so he gets a nice house with forest just over the fence, a place where adventure can happen at any moment. I imagine this is at the foot of the mountains somewhere…

This is still the early days of these sketches, there’s a niggling thought at the back of my head that Biko’s house should be a bungelow… we’ll see…

Macintosh Local Area

One of the difficulties of doing a weekly strip is making yourself stay consistent, so in order to help with THAT I’ve been drawing maps. Just rough maps of locations we’ll see on the regular (or maybe just the once…) Here’s the Macintosh general area (some names here may change – actually the whole map may change as the stories need arise… take this as a map someone who once visited the area drew but they’ve probably put somethings in the wrong place…)

The whole thing is based on hazy memories of Newcastle in Northern Ireland, imagined locations and the name Black Skull mountains comes from  me seeing the location “Black Skull” in Northern Ireland, which is the name of a tiny village (I leave googling the fascinatingly awful reason it’s called Black Skull as an exercise for the reader…)

The three mountain peaks came about because I wanted mountains on the badge, and … one was the Toblerone logo, two was Twin Peaks and that left three. So three it was.



Monster MACS script: Page One

PAGE ONE

This page is an orphan.

This is a seven-panel page, with three tiers; two panels on the top, three across the middle, and two on the bottom.


Panel One

This is the smaller panel on this tier. Here we’re looking at the grotesque face (probably head and shoulders) of a Fiji Mermaid. Horrible, fanged monkey/fish hybrid. Let’s make sure it has enough hair on (whatever bits of it you like) it to make the reader think the title could refer to it. Maybe it has one hand/claw reaching out towards us. It looks terrifying, but also a bit fake and OTT. Needs to have a tag in the case identifying it as a “Fiji Mermaid (19thcentury)”.

There are two balloons from off-panel.

Balloon 1 (off): It’s horrible!

Balloon 2 (off): Hideous!


Panel Two

Here we’ve spun around so we’re looking out from inside the glass cabinet/case which contains the mermaid. We’re looking past its head/ shoulder out at the kids who are stood in front of it, staring and frowning in amazement, interest, and disgust. Evieis on the left, Li in the middle, Biko on the right. Biko is making notes in a notebook. Fort the dog is licking or eating some candy floss or ice cream from a passing child (unnoticed by them). We can see that they are inside an old fashioned tent – this is kind of a P T Barnum type travelling exhibit (https://cryptozoologymuseum.com/exhibitions/is sort of a good ref, but I’m sure you get the idea)

Li, smiling slightly, has two balloons, there’s one FX from Fortstealing the candy floss, and we have the chapter number and title.

Li: I don’t know…

Li: …I think it’s kind of cool.

FX: SLURP

Chapter One: Something Hairy This Way Comes.


Panel Three

These three middle-tier panels are going to be our introduction to each of the three main characters. So, these are kind of flashback panels (at least they’re not set in the “present”), showing each kid in their natural surroundings. Maybe panels Three, Four, Five, and Six all need to be coloured differently to panels One, Two, and Seven?

This panel shows Li sat in his bedroom at a desk/drawing board. There are classic film monster posters on the wall – The Wolfman, The Creature from the Black Lagoon, Zombies, or similar (doesn’t have to be real posters/films, obviously). We can see monster models, a console with cases for zombie fighting games, comics like SCREAM! laying around. Li wearing headphones is furiously sketching a monster (big hairy werewolf, maybe) on a big A3 pad.

There are three captions (maybe in a kind of mock Top Trumps style?).

Cap: Name: Li Wei Leong.

Cap: Expert in: Monster movies, games, and comics.

Cap: Skills: Art, skateboarding, and sarcasm.


Panel Four

Here we have a shot of Evie wearing her scouts uniform, which is absolutely covered in achievement badges. She’s posing with one foot up on a pile of rocks, a heavy stick in one hand which has served on her walking stick on the hike she’s just undertaken. She has a big rucksack on her back, with pans and things hanging from it. She has a pair of binoculars hanging around her neck. Behind her, we can see the green countryside stretching away. It looks like she’s at the top of a hill. Maybe include squirrels, birds, rabbits, etc for extra wildlife/naturalness.

Three captions.

Cap: Name: Evie Ewan.

Cap: Expert in: Campfire stories, local legends, and hidden places.

Cap: Skills: Tracking, camping, and survival.


Panel Five

This is Biko’s introductory panel. He’s in a library (not too modern, but maybe not exactly Victorian either – up to you really), seated at a desk/table. We can see shelves and shelves of books all around him. Biko has a laptop computer open on the desk as well as several books and notebooks, and he looks like he’s researching hard (maybe chewing the end of a pencil as he cross-references. Under the desk (or maybe beside Biko’s chair depending on the angle) we can see Fort the dog dozing.

Three captions.

Cap: Name: Biko Morris.

Cap: Expert in: Cryptozoology, mysteries, and the unexplained.

Cap: Skills: Research, reference, and always making notes.


Panel Six

This panel shows a printed out photograph of the whole gang pinned to a corkboard (in their HQ – which is probably a shed or a tree-house… we’ll get to that). It’s a selfie taken by Li, with the other two squashed in next to him, their arms around each other’s shoulders. Fort is jumping up and licking Biko’s face, so he’s got an awkward/disgusted expression and maybe his glasses are wonky. Also pinned on the corkboard we can Li’s logo which he’s designed and drawn for the group. There might be other photos of the group or individuals, and maybe some newspaper clippings headlined things like MYSTERY OF THE LOST HIKERS, and STRANGE CREATURE SIGHTED, but the main focus is the image of the kids (and dog) and the logo/badge.

Three captions.

Cap: They are the Macintosh Area Cryptozoological Society. M.A.C.S.for short.

Cap: Monster MACS, if you ask Li.

Caps: Because that sounds cooler, and has the word Monster in it.


Panel Seven

Back in the present. This is a shot of the kids turning towards us (away from the mermaid in the case) with a look of shock/surprise as someone shouts at them. Let’s make it extra dramatic as if this is going to be the start of something big. The kids all wide-eyed, but eager as if on the cusp of a new adventure.

Two balloons from off-panel.

Balloon: Hey, MACS!

Balloon: Monster MACS!

Monster MACS sketchbook

every decent sized project I start gets a sketchbook – it’s largely just a collection of sketches/background images that I keep in a separate clip studio file so all the main comics happen in another one.

From now on $5+ subscribers on the patreon get to see all of this background stuff, there may be spoilers (but I’ll try and keep those away) and there may well be some deadends, cool designs we abandon, pages unusued, what have you. But that’s what’ll happen 🙂


Monster MACS page 1

And finally, we meet the gang.

Stay tuned. Live for everyone on Saturdays, and if you’re a subscriber you’ll get to see it early.

We’re opening with a full colour page, but expect the rest to be in b&w with maybe a monotone, we’ll see!

If we can get the patreon up a bit I’d love us to be able to afford a colourist, and once we get to the end it’s possible we’ll look to get it it all in colour.

This page took an age, because I’m trying to find the voice and I’d gotten so used to adapting tweets going to a full script was a bit more of a speed bump. But I hope you like it!

Sketch

This was the prompt sketch for what’s coming. It’s not the final by any means, but it was sort of the starting point. And, for me at least, it’s the anchor point for how the project will be drawn.

More to come…